Do you think my story is good?

You Write like you truly enjoy writing. This is probably my favorite short story that I have ever read...even if it isn't finished. I know how you feel... I'm 12 too and I write descriptive pieces but when i'm done I don't know if ppl will like it. When ppl read it tho, They say I write lie a true writer. I espeacially like the begining because it gives you a bit of a mystery and you want to figure out what is wrong with Sarah's world. My only 2 critisms are that you should describe Falion's Great hall more because I imagine it as a big white emptiness.(If this is what you wanted the nevermind) And also maybe later describe what the holes are for( i no it's not done) Right now they seem to be alot like you are copying the book- Holes.Bt you keep writing and perhaps e-mail me the end product because i'm dying to know the ending of this magnificent peice!